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Great Wyrm
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Sun Jul 18, 2004 10:39 am
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It seems a bit short to me. I know it's hard to write (good) long poems, and I bet it's tricky when you're stuck in a narrow style like this, but to me, this poem doesn't really say much.
I also don't like the last stanza. It seems like it it's a completely different subject. The first three establish sensory imagery about the world at night; I like those, and I think they could have been a good lead to a longer poem. That last verse, however, suddenly takes the focus from the formless night and, out of nowhere, brings a person and some emotional baggage into it where, IMHO, it doesn't belong.
Quote | ... if a worm's hunting you, there's not much time. |
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